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Post by moonshine on Jan 8, 2011 7:13:42 GMT -8
Name: Petaldance
Prefix Meaning: Petaldance was born in the middle of greenleaf, when the petals of various herbs and flowers were falling. One landed on Petaldance.
Suffix Meaning: When she's happy, Petaldance eyes appear to "dance" like the petals durring a windy greenleaf, but that rarely happens any more.
Age: 18 moons
Rank: queen
Clan: Sunclan
Description: Petaldance's pelt is a rich brown, like the soil in a forest. She has a darker stripe going down her back that curls in spirals around heb tail. Her bones have begun showing through her skin from her travels. At first glanse, her muscle tone proves she had been in many battles. She has the look of a cat with emotional problems.
Her face is the same rich brown as her pelt, with a lighter mark in the center of her forehead. She has three scars across her face. One barely missed her eyes, while the second cut into her lip and the third cut the skin of her right ear. Her emerald green eyes have cherryblossom pink rims at the edges. She sometimes has a gleam in her eyes, but her current circumstances have robbed her of that shine, making her eyes like old gems. Often, her eyes are darkened by the trials that she had faced and the pain of a betrayal.
Personality: Petaldance's true personality is very quiet and reserved. She doesn't easily trust other cats, especially toms. She wants a mate, but is wary about opening her heart to another tom. She is often alone, and doesn't go to other cats. She isn't even very comfortable around the leader any more.
Petaldance often lays in the shadows, where her pelt blends in reletively easily with the contours of the land. She is used to other cats avoiding her, but can work well with others if she wants to. She is often in a bad mood. Sometimes she gets exceptionally angry an goes off into a den to be alone. When this happens, it is best to just leave her alone and let her calm down.
At least, that's how she was. Since the birth of her kits, Petaldance's demeanor has brightened. She smiles more, and will easily talk about present circumstances. She attempts to shy away from questions about her past, though. When asked about her life before the kits, she will often get very quiet or change the topic. Her love for her kits and her maternal instinct to care for and protect them has broken through the depressed haze she had been in since the incident with the father of the kits. She just might be open to having a second mate, but not until the kits are grown into apprentices at least. She is very respectful and shows it much more openly than she used to.
History: Petaldance was born to Cherryblossom and Softpelt, warriors of Sunclan. She had three siblings, Dawnkit, Duskkit, and Dovekit. Dawnkit and Duskkit were always together, they had been inseperable. Dovekit had gone off on her own, always getting ahead of the other kits of her age. Petaldance, then Petalkit, was often alone until a cat named Greykit had seen her.
Greykit and Petalkit were about the same age, and became apprentices at about the same time. Petalkit, now Petalpaw, was apprenticed to Greypaw's father, Blazeplet. Greypaw was apprenticed to Cherryblossom. They were the best of friends. Then Greypaw got older and they grew appart. Petalpaw wished they hadn't, but then Greypaw caught a fever that the medicine cat was unable to cure. Petalpaw was devastated at her friend's death, but even more so when Dovekit, then Dovepaw, caught the fever and also died.
When they became warriors, Petaldance, Dawnheart, and Duskpelt went on a hunting trip together. They found a rat and fought it. The rat bit Duskpelt, and the bite got infected. Dawnheart had been by Duskpelt's side until he took his last breath. The death of a second kit shattered Petaldance's mother, Cherryblossom. Cherryblossom refused to eat or drink. Eventually she died of her own depression. By this time, Petaldance and Dawnheart had only their clanmates and their father to help them.
One day, a tom named Blacknight came into camp and asked to join the clan. Petaldance saw him and fell for his ebony pelt and deep blue eyes instantly. She believed him to have the same feelings, and they mated. Softly after, Petaldance followed him out of camp and found him meeting up with another cat. She watched and listened, and saw Dawnheart. When she heard that Blacknight had only been planning to take one of the leader's lives, Petaldance and Dawnheart jumped him. Petaldance attacked him out of hurt and rage, while Dawnheart attacked his friend (who's name they never got). Petaldance killed Blacknight, who's real name had been simply Night, then ran back to camp. Dawnheart was killed in the process. She had hidden herself in the warrior's den for a long time. Dawnheart was treated just like any other clan warrior after death. A night of mourning before being taken to the gravesite. That pulled Petaldance down more than anything else had... That made her feel more alone than ever...
Then her kits, Smallkit and Fogkit, were born. Petaldance claims that without them, there's no telling what would've happened to her.
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Post by Fia on Jan 8, 2011 9:45:20 GMT -8
Moonshine, I know she's not even done yet, but we've never had a BlossomClan and there's never been a Flowerstar. X3 The former leaders and recent histories of the Calsn can be found in the Clan Histories thread on the Main Board. 
And there's no blackcough, there's whitecough and greencough. Had this argument with someone already. XD
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Post by moonshine on Jan 8, 2011 9:58:07 GMT -8
Not done with the history. She came from a different area. And I'll fix that.
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Post by sunfrost on Jan 9, 2011 13:29:59 GMT -8
I'm sorry Moonshine, but having a cat from a completely different Clan like this won't work out here. How many loners seriously have heard of the Clans? None. Seeing as the loners always wander around, you'd think they'd have come across some if there were others out there. But they haven't, which leads to the conclusion that having Clans are a unique phenomena that only exists here in the setting of SW. And even if a loner did hear about it, it's unlikely they would start their own Clan anyway. It's much easier to simply join one. And even if they did start one, there's absolutely no likelihood that they would have the same rankings as a Clan, unless they joined a Clan and then left to start another one (which is also very unlikely). Adding to that, StarClan only watches over our four Clans. They exist for and help no other Clan. So not only is the existence of BlossomClan unlikely, it goes against our setting and it goes against the StarClan we have here. Therefore, her history cannot work here at SW. I'm sorry to tell you this, as it means you'll have to remake her completely, but it just won't work here. This means she can be a regular loner, but that would mean no warrior name for her; only the Clans have warrior names. It'd really be much easier and would make much more sense if you created her as a warrior in one of our Clans and changed her history accordingly |
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Post by moonshine on Jan 9, 2011 13:37:44 GMT -8
Great... Gotta redo everything... Personality, history... Grr...
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Post by Fia on Jan 12, 2011 20:03:51 GMT -8
Looking good, Moonshine! One little thing confuses me, though. In her personality, it says that Fogkit is the only kit not killed by Blacknight, but her history makes no mention of kits or killing. X3 Can you clarify that, please, and just make a note of how the Clan reacted to Dawnheart's death? That's all, thanks for fixing her up so well!
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Post by moonshine on Jan 12, 2011 20:11:51 GMT -8
Fixed!
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Post by Fia on Jan 12, 2011 20:21:15 GMT -8
Great, thanks! ^_____^ Your bio has been ACCEPTED and will now be moved the the appropriate board. Well done!
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