Nightscar -Rogue [OLD]

[nightkit]

Name: Nightscar

Prefix Meaning: Nightscar blends easily into the night.

Suffix Meaning: Nightscar has a scar down his face.

Age: 28 moons.

Rank: Rouge

Clan: None

Description: A well muscled, thin but strong cat with dark gray-black fur, Nightscar blends easily into the night. Strong and long legs, along with his thin tail, help him balance on dangerous slopes, high cliffs, and small gorge trails that if you fall, it leads to instant death. Matted fur that clings to his sides doesn't really stick out like kinky or smooth fur during the night or hiding in shadows during daytime. Creepy as he is, his face is a shocker.

Matted, clinging fur shows thin layer of muscle but more bone. Nightscar's face is gaunt, patches of his skin visible and stretched tight under his thin fur. His whisker, are scarce and uneven, like claws have been tearing at them, pulling them out and slicing them so they hang crooked. His mouth isn't a beauty, either. Scarred, torn flesh around the sides and roof of his mouth aren't well hidden by his rough, torn tongue. His fangs are yellow, musty things with dried blood still staining them. Coated thick with saliva that drips, he isn't a pretty eater. His eyes are a little out of focus, and one is higher than the other. Both a deep, black-gray, they mist up at times. His ears are battered, scarred and torn. He isn't deaf, he actually has extremely well hearing, better than ordinary cats. Last but certainly not the least horrifying, is his scar. Bulging, red-pink that rips down starting from his ear, cutting through his mouth, and then finally ending near his chin. Nightscar sounds horrible, right? Wait until you hear about his personality.

Personality: A sharp-tongued, beastly cat, Nightscar is known for terrible manners and killing harmless kits. His eyes have a creepy glint when he has an idea. And it usually isn't a pretty idea. He loves gore and bloodshed and to feel his claws tear through flesh, or to feel life die under his paws. His bloodthirsty, cruel nature is because he was twisted by grief.

Nightscar is a slightly fearful cat. He fears Soundstar will uncover his plot, that he wil die before Petaldance is killed, that his plan won't follow through. He wishes Smallkit doesn't look like Blacknight, otherwise he wouldn't feel guilty for taking her. He knows he should kill the kits, but then, he knows he couldn't. He would kill himself first before cutting off connections to Blacknight.

Nightscar doesn't love any cat. He just loves his dead brother, Blacknight, and hates his brother's mate, Petaldance, for killing him. His endless hate for every cat doesn't really have a reason. He uses 'Because they're related to Petaldance' and 'They hated my brother' a lot, and they are true, most of the time. The list includes Soundstar, Petaldance,...The list goes on and on. He is devilish and cunning, hoping to get a cat on his side to take Smallkit and Fogkit, leading Petaldance to him, so that he can kill Petaldance once and for all. He plans to use Sunningrocks and the large cave underneath it to kill her.

History: Nightscar's history isn't a pretty one. He and his brother were abandoned by 2 moons. They learned how to hunt, make dens, and fight for themselves. They never knew their parents, and it still remains unknown to this day. They wish they had never been neglected, and they have a burning hate for their parents, who never cared or loved them, and caused them to have not even adoptive parents!

At 8 moons, Blacknight (Then Crooked) decided to name themselves like warrior cats. Crooked became Blacknight, and Scathe became Duskclaw. They had hidden in a small cove near a fox den, and many bunny dens. They had a wonderful green-leaf. Then, leaf-bare, and with it came trouble.

At 12 moons, they met a fox. Duskclaw was badly wounded on his face, and the fox left a scar. Duskclaw decided to change his name to Nightscar. The fox also destroyed their home, and it was leaf-bare, they couldn't construct a new one, there were no sticks to use. They hid in Twolegplace for 6 moons, surviving on crow-food alone. Then, Nightscar got whitecough and rat sickness. His whitecough turned into greencough, and he almost died, until a strange cat healed him. The cat directed them straight to SunClan, and that's where the "love" began.

Blacknight had an idea to take one of Soundstar's lives. He would join the Clan, while Nightscar stayed low and joined the rouges together to plan an ambush. Things went well until Blacknight fell in "love" with Petaldance and had kits. Nightscar just needed Blacknight to convince a skeptical she-cat to do the ambush, when Petaldance saw them talking. She, of course, took the chance and killed him in secret. Nightscar heard about this, and killed Dawnheart, Petaldance's sister. Petaldance doesn't know Nightscar and Blacknight are brothers, and Nightscar plans to use that against her. Nightscar also did some sping on the Clan, and he found out that Petaldance has two kits. He plans to use them in the death of Petaldance.

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[Fia]

Hey, Nightkit! The evil little fur ball looks pretty interesting, but like with most bios, I've got to ask for a few adjustments to be made.

First, cats don't have red eyes. It's not genetically possible. Violet-blue and black are as far as we stretch reality; no red eyes.

Second, there are a few parts to his personality that don't make sense. First, it's Soundstar, not Sonarstar... XD Second, there's no way he would know the kits' names, as they were born after Blacknight was killed. Second, Falconpaw is in NightClan, so there's no way he would know him, either. Also, please add a bit to his personality beyond 'murderous and hateful'; maybe talk about his intelligence, any fears he may have, any unique habits (besides murder). Personalities are very complex.

Now, his history actually needs Moonshine's approval as well as mine, since she has the story of Blacknight and Petaldance long established. I'll ask her to post here and say what she thinks of it. In the meantime, please address the other issues I mentioned.

Last thing: please put the headings (Name, Rank, Description, etc. in bold font so they're more easily spotted. Thanks!

[moonshine]

I approve Fia. Nightkit here posted on my old thread looking for a vengeful tom who was Blacknight's brother. I honestly stopped thinking anyone would respond to it after a few months though... But that's beside the point.

[Fia]

I know. I just wanted to be sure you didn't object to any of the details of Blacknight's past as they're stated here.

EDIT: Wonderful, thank you! Your bio has been ACCEPTED and will now be moved to the appropriate board. ^____^ Enjoy him!