Jay - DeathClan [OLD]

[nightkit]

Name: Jay

Prefix Meaning: When Jay was a kit, a blue jay feather landed on his head at birth, and his mother decided to call him "Jay".

Suffix Meaning: No suffix

Age: 25 moons

Rank: Warrior

Clan: DeathClan

Description: Why did the jay feather land on his head? Just because a feather lands on his head doesn't mean you have to name your son after it. But no, his mother did it anyway. But he did look something like the bird, with his gray tabby pelt. Even their underbellies looked alike, both white. Of course, there has to be some difference, like his tail, all white with a black tip. Jay and the bird are something alike. Maybe.

Jay's face doesn't really give him the face of a torturer beneath the nose. He looks like your everyday cat. You glance at his mouth and nose, and walk away. But if you are brave enough to look above, be warned. His eyes are a deep green, his left eye with two long scars that run down. Jay's ears are clawed at the tips, and if he opens his mouth, run. In his mouth are 35 craggy, pointy teeth jammed together, strong enough to tear even stones apart. His fangs have dried blood and are yellow-brown. Spit flys out his mouth when he lunges for blood. Be warned.

If you challenge Jay to a fight, you'll notice powerful back legs that he swings forward to knock you off your paws, then swing in for the kill. Just before you either die, or roll away you'll notice his right paw swing in. It twitches in a weird way, and it's claws are longer than his left paw. If he doesn't raise his paw, scoot away. He'll use his teeth on you, and his teeth have deadly precision. If you manage to survive that, his muscular legs will boost him up, and he'll cut his right paw down your stomach (hopefully for him) and slap your muzzle with his left paw. Just...don't risk your life battling him. Seriously.

Personality: Some cat's think Jay his a sweet cat. Then, your claw get torn out. Jay is a deadly, icy cat that can be fickle and sometimes passionate for cats. Jay just wants to torture and hurt cats in every way he can, except for his mother and the few cats he likes. Jay never loved any cat, except for his mother. Cutting things up is his only liking, along with torturing cats and gray days, raining, and snow. His rare, lovable side brings out love, and the real passionate things he loves, like being with cats, nighttime, his mother, and sticks. He loves sticks. But he loves snow and cold the most.

Cold is a warmth in Jay's heart, because it reminds him of his mother, who is still alive. Cold reminds Jay of love, warmth, life, and his mother's warm milk. Cold calms Jay's mind, so he can figure out cat's weaknesses, and kill them. Jay just loves killing cats, and cats are sick if they wander during cold times, so they are easier to kill or torture. Raking claws through flesh is Jay's favorite thing. So that's why he loves cold.

When he isn't killing something, Jay can be found having a conversation with a cat, eating fresh-kill, or mewing to himself. Talking is what Jay does. Talking to cats, talking to things, and talking to himself. Jay also can be found sitting on a boulder, watching the sunset.

History: Jay was born a only kit, in the first litter, born in a empty hollow of a tree in Leaf-bare. Being with his mother, Silk, calmed him and made him love. Jay was always a little unusual. Jay loved sticks, and he played with them all the time. Jay also loveed crawling under the snow. Playing as a kit was fun, but sometimes he wished he knew his father, or had kits to play with. He then learned how to be lonesome.

When Jay was 10 moons old, his mother left him at DeathClan, and became a kittypet. Silk feared that Jay would become distressed in Twolegplace, because he loved the wild. He liked the cats at DeathClan, because they were like family to him. Killing and torturing cats is fun to Jay. Other than killing and death, Jay is really a soft-hearted cat. He loves being with cats, and never likes to be alone.

When Jay was 20 moons old, he was prey hunting and got attacked by fox Jay fought the fox and killed it, leaving his eye red, swollen and bleeding, pelt sticky with the warm scent of blood. He realized he was prey hunting and caught more prey for the Clan.

Jay has never been in a real Clan battle, and he longs to have one. He has heard the elders talk about battles, Clan wars, and many other wars between Clans. Jay wishes for territorial explosions, ending in huge chaos for the Clans. Blood spilled everywhere, dying bodies, a picture only DeathClan cats usually see.

Picture: amazingworldofwarriors.webs.com/2699072249_5dd8a95b32.jpeg

[Fia]

Looking good! Just a few little bugs to sort out.

First, while his name is perfectly fine... no bird is going to land on a cat, even a kit, except perhaps an eagle or vulture. If a Jay's feather landed on him, that's fine, but a bird has no business landing on a newborn kitten even smaller than itself - especially with Silk, a full grown predator, right there.

His physical description looks good, except that cat's eyes don't change color - certainly not red. We don't allow red eyes. Just omit that, please, it's pretty much a physical impossibility. X3 (Also, JD doesn't have any friend's; he is utterly mad and the voice in his head doesn't let him make friends. And just in general, don't assume someone else's character either likes or dislikes yours. They may not want that for their cat. )

So, his personality... surely there's something to him besides killing? How does he behave when he isn't killing? Is he capable of having a coherent conversation? Is he willing to? What does he think of the others in DeathClan? Besides murder and torture, what does he do with his time?

His history's just a little bit brief - could you flesh it out a bit? When he was a kit, did he show any sign of... unusual traits? Since "Jay never loved any cat, because he was born mentaly dieasesd", did he actually love Silk, or was he simply dependent on/somewhat attached to her? Or did he start to it when she abandoned him in DeathClan? (Why didn't she take him with her to be a kittypet?)

Now, badgers are massive animals; no cat, even Fading, could kill one alone. (The 'invincible' Lionblaze could barely kill a fox!) And after somehow surviving a badger attack, it'd be hard for a cat to stand, let alone kill a fox. If he ran into a fox later, that'd be fine, but not right after a badger attack. X3

One last thing - please don't put words in my cat's mouth. Maybe Fading would do that, maybe he wouldn't, but please don't assume he would. While roleplaying, that would be considered power playing - the ultimate no-no! X3

Anyhow, that's it, I think. ^____^ He should fit right in with DeathClan once he's fixed up a little bit!

[Fia]

Fantastic, thank you! ^____^ Your bio has been ACCEPTED and will now be moved to the appropriate board! Feel free to toss Jay into "The Stars Have Disappeared", the main plot thread in the Moonphase Pond board; just be sure you're familiar with the thread's events and intended direction first! Have fun!